P5

Evaluation of my evaluations

Jade mentioned that ADAM was always capitalised however that is supposed to be the case as ADAM is a AI and AI'S usually have capitalised names. I will change all of the other grammar mistakes. Jade mentioned commas were missing and both mentioned I didn't have full stops at the end of my dialogues I will fix this as I didn't know I needed this. Both said formatting was good so that's okay. Jade mentioned I should add more to the action in terms of better descriptions which I will do and Catherine said I needed I could have done character descriptions for the characters and I could have done that better. Jade said I should have added character parenthetical for what people are thinking at times which I can do, the rest of the feedback is positive. Jade said I should do more world building so I could add that and Catherine said I should make the action happen earlier so there is less talking but I thought to add the action to page 9 or 10 so I won't change that. Jade wants me to add adjectives so I can do that and Catherine's feedback was all good.